This is where the house would have gone,
if they'd expanded this direction.
Bulldozed, sun-dazed, gritty
with suburban litter; leaves, paper bags, clay.
We come early, chain our bikes to the bars
of the metal fence by the coyote trail,
gathering what we can--feathers,
bones, Cheetos bags; and bring them here.
I stretch and grasp each one, asking
for a journey that brings me
back to the houses I knew,
even if only to be poisoned by them.
This is where we would have lived.
This is where we would have seen
hawks wheel, mockingbirds scream,
and dewberry thickets turning green.
-- C. Sandlin, for The Sunday Muse
Wow this was totally worth the wait my friend! What could have been and what is found....this is haunting and gave me chills but at the same time it is spectacular. That ending is utterly amazing!!!
ReplyDeleteMan's abuse of Mother Earth is well portrayed here! Well said.
ReplyDeleteOut with the old, in with the new. That is someone's truism but I cannot remember whose. Consumer goods manufacturing companies work this way. The farmhouse where I was born and lived in until college was bulldozed into a pile and burned after my parents died.
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A deeply stirring meditation Chrissa
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much love
such a unique take on the prompt and brilliant imagery of what is and what might have been. the final verse especially vivid
ReplyDeleteI see all that grief in the prompt, as you did (even though I made a joke in the comments!) Nice job bringing that to ground.
ReplyDeleteThe gathering of the symbols - like a ritual of regret. The longing, even if it is death to us (love that line!) is palpable. This is so well written!
ReplyDeleteThere's a sense of void all through. The space of in between is quite telling.
ReplyDeleteA big WOW from me, Chrissa .... I can envision this continuing for stanza after stanza. So much to say. A beautiful write.
ReplyDeleteI'm suddenly back to my childhood, with my friends exploring and finding unnatural things in natural places. Where we had hoped to be first we were just one of many, like the houses that were eventually built that erased our open spaces.
ReplyDeleteI found this unsettling as a reader. There is a sense of loss within the space of time. The contrast of gathering feathers and Cheetos bags made me sigh. On my walks I often find man-made litter and I ponder, who does this?
ReplyDeleteI love this piece so much. It reaches way down into my bones—especially the dewberry thickets. We had them at several of our former homes, so it hurts us when we don’t find them in our follow-up spaces.
ReplyDeleteP.S. I love how cleverly the title tells us your age at the time.
ReplyDeleteAh, some activism to save the green spaces. Yay! Your closing stanza makes my heart ache.
ReplyDeleteTo me this feels like Sacred Ground. Ground that has been stolen from those who continue to honor it. Beautiful and powerful.
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Beautiful and heartbreaking, Chrissa.
ReplyDeleteIt takes courage to put across one's objection. A pity the strong normally have their way. Love the expression of standing for a cause, Chrissa!
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Activism to save bits of earth that grow green and wild is such a wonderful thing. Earth chokes on the footprint of men.
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